Illustration - Working Methods FINAL PROJECT!

I had originally planned to do a set of illustrations that had the look and feel of an airline safety card, and the theme was going to be either How to Survive the Canadian Wilderness, or an instruction manual for building a bookshelf. After showing my instructor my initial sketches, and telling her that I wouldn't be joining the Narrative Illustration class next semester, she changed my project to a narrative project instead.

I've done it in a comic style and tried to keep my lines clean, but according to her it's still very 'sketchy.'

My original idea is the sketch at the bottom.